“1個(gè)字母”文書(shū)憑啥能夠讓美國(guó)名校的爭(zhēng)搶?zhuān)?/h1> 日期:2022-06-21 11:14:56 閱讀量:0 作者:b老師
此前,,靠1個(gè)字母打動(dòng)哈佛的文書(shū)風(fēng)靡了內(nèi)外網(wǎng),引起了熱烈反響,!甚至被業(yè)內(nèi)人士評(píng)價(jià)為“Genius之作”,!“1個(gè)字母”文書(shū)憑啥能夠讓美國(guó)名校們?yōu)橹疇?zhēng)搶?zhuān)?/p>
文書(shū)的作者是一位來(lái)自馬賽諸塞州的18歲女孩,,阿比蓋爾?麥克(Abigail Mack),她剛經(jīng)歷了2021Fall入學(xué)申請(qǐng),。
在這篇“Genius”的文書(shū)加持下,,她不僅拿到了西北大學(xué)、圣母大學(xué),、達(dá)特茅斯學(xué)院和喬治城大學(xué)的offer,,更是在錄取率僅有3.43%的哈佛本科入學(xué)申請(qǐng)中,提前收到了哈佛大學(xué)在放榜前發(fā)來(lái)的“Likely Letter”(即將錄取通知書(shū)),!
結(jié)果如下:
哈佛大學(xué) Accepted
西北大學(xué) Accepted
達(dá)特茅斯學(xué)院 Accepted
圣母大學(xué) Accepted
喬治城大學(xué) Accepted
耶魯大學(xué) Waitlisted
杜克大學(xué) Waitlisted
普林斯頓大學(xué) Rejected
這篇文章講述了她母親因癌癥而去世了,,以后她與父親的以后的生活和心理歷程。
文書(shū)開(kāi)頭,,Abigail說(shuō)因?yàn)橐粋€(gè)單詞“parents”(父母)而開(kāi)始討厭字母“S”,,這個(gè)單詞末尾的“S”,徹底改變了她的人生,。
Abigail曾有一位父親與一位母親組成的“parents”父母,但在癌癥奪走母親的生命后,,她的人生就只剩下父親,。
但“parents”里面的“s”,卻永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)消失,。
I hate the letter "S." Of the 164,777 words with "S," I only grapple with one. To condemn an entire letter because of its use 0.0006 percent of the time sounds statistically absurd, but that one case changed 100 percent of my life. I used to have two parents, but now I have one, and the "S" in "parents" isn't going anywhere.
"S" follows me. I can't get through a day without being reminded that while my friends went out to dinner with their parents, I ate with my parent. As I write this essay, there is a blue line under the word "parent" telling me to check my grammar; even Grammarly assumes that I should have parents, but cancer doesn't listen to edit suggestions. I won't claim that my situation is as unique as one in 164,777, but it is still an exception to the rule — an outlier. The world isn't meant for this special case.
The world wouldn't abandon "S" because of me, so I tried to abandon "S." I could get away from "S" if I stayed busy: you can't have dinner with your "parent" (thanks again Grammarly) if you are too busy to have family dinner. Any spare time that I had, I filled. I became known as the "busy kid," the one that everyone always asks "how do you have time?" Morning meetings, classes, afternoon meetings, volleyball practice, dance class, rehearsal in Boston, homework, sleep, repeat.
Though my specific schedule has changed over time, the business has not. I couldn't fill the loss that the "S" left in my life, but I could at least make sure I didn't have to think about it. There were so many things in my life. I couldn't control, so I controlled what I could. My schedule. I never succumbed to the stress of overcommitting. I thrived.
It became a challenge to juggle it all, but I'd soon find a rhythm. But rhythm, wasn't what I wanted. Rhythm may not have an "S," but "S" sure liked to come by when I was idle. So, I added another ball, and another, and another. Soon I noticed the same "color" balls kept falling into my hands – theatre, academics, politics. I wanted to come into contact with these more and more, so I further narrowed the scope of my color wheel and increased the range of shades of my primary colors.
Life became easier to juggle, but, for the first time, I didn't add another ball. I found my rhythm and I embraced it. I stopped running away from a single "S" and began chasing a double "S"— paSSion. Passion has given me purpose. I was shackled to “S” as I tried to escape the confines of the traditional familial structure. No matter how far I ran, "S" stayed behind me because I kept looking back. I've finally learnt to move forward instead of away, and it's liberating.
"S" got me moving, but it hasn't kept me going. I wish I could end here, triumphant and basking in my new inspiration, but life is more convoluted. Motivation is double edged sword: it keeps me moving forward, but it also keeps me from having to look back. I want to claim that I showed courage in being able to turn from "S," but I can't.
Motivation is what keeps "S" at bay. I am not perfectly healed, but I am perfect at navigating the best way to heal me. I don't seek out sadness. So "S" must stay on the sidelines, and until I am completely ready, motivation is more than enough for me.
- Abigail Mack,,Brockton High School, MA
文書(shū)全文,通過(guò)自己的遭遇講述自己的心歷路程,,凸顯申請(qǐng)者從來(lái)沒(méi)有屈服于過(guò)度投入所帶來(lái)的壓力,,反而蓬勃成長(zhǎng)。
有人說(shuō)是靠“賣(mài)慘”博取招生官同情,。但如果只是單純賣(mài)慘,,只需要寫(xiě)好“腳本”就行了。事實(shí)上,,招生官更看重的是申請(qǐng)者面對(duì)困境的努力和積極面對(duì)挑戰(zhàn)的心態(tài),,與文書(shū)相對(duì)應(yīng)的活動(dòng),和其他申請(qǐng)材料,,相輔相成,,才能勾勒出一個(gè)完整的申請(qǐng)者形象,這才是招生官動(dòng)心的真正原因,。
怎么樣,,你能寫(xiě)成這樣的文書(shū)嗎?
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